In the second installment of the WJT, I ran into a few issues. In the lead of this article it reads "These past four decades, though not on the field, Denison is still as much a part of EV sports as he ever was." Since the dedication happened in the past, the sentence should read "Denison has been as much a part of..." I think fixing the verb to put the action in the past tense would make it read a little more clearly.
Another issue I had in this story is purely an editing choice. We have discussed in class the ethics/science to changing quotes. In each quote from the nice old man the story focuses on, there is a grammatically incorrect, if colorful, sentence. "You got to keep your mouth shut," and words like "holler," pop up more frequently than I ever thought they would. I think it makes sense that this kind of publication would keep the language true to what he said, but there is definitely something to making him sound slightly better spoken. I wouldn't have changed all the words, but maybe fixed up a few things more than the WJT staff did.
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