This is a news brief from the Williamsburg Journal Tribune, a small town newspaper from Williamsburg, Iowa. It is describing the new school dismissal alert system and says "Late starts, early dismissals or bus routes on hard surfaces only are just a few of the alerts provided." There are a few too many adverbs and adjectives thrown in. Instead of using "only" and "just" they should have instead used one to describe the wide variety of services provided through this new system. Either that, or used some creative commas to let only describe something else in the sentence.
Since I love small-town newspapers, the next few posts will be from the WJT— something to look forward to!
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